Skydancer

Cherry

By Bee

Sun, 04 Oct 2015
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21 comments
 

Swift me to the paper moon that haunts

the dawn, your hand held tight 

in mine, a promise not to let me fall

back down to earth too soon.



Swirl me in a sky-dance far away 

from cold reality that's nighttime more 

than daylight. An hour with you to swoon

the feathered clouds that thread the air



around my shrouded fears for just a brief 

reprieve is all I need. Then gentle me back 

down to earth afloat in kindly words - calmer 

for sweet moments flying high with you.

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Comments

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Lovely and ethereal.

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, Philip.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

And thanks for the cherries. 

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Sheer poetry, dear Bee, and so romantic. Liked it a lot.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Luigi. Pleased you liked it.

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

gentle me back, soft and sweet and ever so neat and true. like ... 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks CM. Glad you liked that.

Bee

Submitted by catherine poarch on

This is beautiful, the structure seems effortless and I like the swift and gentle used as verbs.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you so much, Catherine.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I hope tht calming feeling of flying or swimming lifting up from all the stress with comfort and love stays with you to some extent, leaning on divine arms. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

I hope so too. Thanks Rhiannon,

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Perfection itself.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Ah, thanks Tina.

Bee

Submitted by Pat G on

Swift me, gentle me. It brings instant calm. Lovely lines.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Pat.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Lovely sweet dreamy poem to make us all feel comforted.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean. Glad you found it so. 

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is such a tender loving read Bee,

being with that special someone to share in the magic of a special moment.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jenny.

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

I read  this a few days ago but wasn't able to comment.  The language in this poem is absolutely beautiful.    The opening line and 'Gentle me back...' is a lovely way of expressing the respite  you long for. and the idea of sky dancing is an amazing image. and one that I will not forget.  You make me want to write poetry. The language you use is breathtaking. 

Congratulations on a wonderful poem - loved it.

Moya

 

Submitted by Bee on

You do write poetry, Moya. I've read it and loved it, too. So pleased you liked this one. Sky dancing is fantastic - I guess we can go / do whatever - be with whoever, or wherever we want in our minds, can't we? 

Thank you for such lovely comments.

x

Bee