Ladenbox

Cherry

By catherine poarch

Thu, 17 Nov 2016
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6 comments
 

My country is a ladenbox,

a spillinggift, a weatherwalk,

that marks its time in barleyclocks

and lights the night with firetalk.

We’ve bakergrass and butcherskin

And bevybags of appledrops,

though some may pick the biscuit thin

and some may gorge on gluttoncrops.

But best of all, and this we share,

though moneythin or moneyfat,

that we’ve all come from everywhere

and that’s our shining gloryhat.

Certificate U
Poetry Monthly
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Catherine, I like the flow of this, though I'm afraid I can't work out the meaning of many of your kennings, but I expect others will. 

The 'kenning' idea isn't IP but 'Poetry Monthly' and it's that that may stop. You can change your post to 'Poetry Monthly' rather than 'Poem' if you want to, but if you don't people sometimes put (Poetry Monthly) in the )title. But for 'genre' it's not really Inspiration Point (I don't think you have to put any genre if you don't want to). Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I've changed the genre to Poetry Monthly so it gets seen by the right people Catherine

 

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Thanks to both of you and for changing it to Poetry Monthly. That's typical of me, not reading instructions properly. But amazingly,I seem to be getting email notifications again! Hope it lasts. Yes, I don't think they're right as kennings - I think a kenning should be obvious and literal and these are more lyrical perhaps. But I did love the idea.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

I thought this was inventive and beautiful, Catherine. It's rural and plump. I dont think kennings have to be easily identifiable, part of the historic interest was in the new sounds and what was gained in the process of deconstruction. You can get lots of enjoyment from this piece, the words, the intended meanings etc. Thanks for giving it a bash. The difficulty with Poetry Monthly is that if people dont give it a crack, there's no point posting each month as it relies on participation. I've had less free time for writing and ABC since I started working but do hope PM picks up so it continues. There's always the weekly I.P and that's been going for decades so do not fear.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

In reply to Vera Clark's comment I would like to point out that the lack of feedback might be responsible for people being reticent to participate in the Poetry Monthly. Lately, I had a couple of attempts which were read about 20-25 times but did not receive any criticism whatsoever nor any reason for that. I deleted those efforts as I naturally assumed that they were not good enough and did not meet the given brief but it would have been helpful to receive constructive advice .

 

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Vera, thanks so much and also - I guess to you - for the cherries. I am suitably surprised. Also enjoyed your comments. I find the way language has developed so interesting. I remember watching the Melvyn Bragg programme on English and that he mentioned words being stuck together eg 'mockingbird', in America, as the language moved on there. I'll keep a lookout for the poetry monthlys. My job gets in the way too. Just waiting for that move to the country and a butler to do the dishes!smiley