Schools Out

By skinner_jennifer

Wed, 06 Jun 2018
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In city parks,

Tranquility breached

Only by Resonance

Of metropolis life,

 

Students once

Besieged,

Minds gripped –

determined,

 

Fresh faces

Gathering,

Emblazoned

Expressions,

 

Filter out

Revision,

Left for

Another time,

 

Treasured days

Monopolize

Smiles...adrift

On adolescence,

 

Midst

Summer flora

Drowsy passions

Interweave,

 

Soothing breezes

Exhale sobriety

To whirlwind minds

Now school's out.

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Jenny, though I don't go with the concept of 'Karma', I liked the feel in your poem of a lovely weather half term, and the quietness of the park for those relaxing from exams and revision (as were two of my granchildren and a youngster in our church here) with the flowers, the distance from the noise, and the soft breeze. Last week seemed to be good weather for them to have a proper break and refresh. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Treasured days

Monopolize

Smiles...adrift

On adolescence,

this reminds me so much of the calm before the storm of exams. Beautifully put

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Kicks off lovely mental images, Jenny.

Parson Thru

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

I agree with you about the word Karma, so have changed it to Tranquility, I think it reads better now.

Glad you enjoyed this poem and thank you for sharing your thoughts.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Glad you liked those lines Di,

All the pressure of hard studying, youngsters need some form of release. I tried to convey that in this poem.

Appreciate the feedback.

Thank you.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Kevin,

to know you could picture the scene is very much appreciated.

I'm grateful to you for reading and letting me know.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by celticman on

doesn't seem that long ago, how the summer holidays lasted forever, then didn't. 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thankks for reading Jack.

Jenny.