Dusk

Gold cherry
Poem of the week
Pick of the Month

By Jane Hyphen

Mon, 27 May 2024
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24 comments
 

 

The girl with the softest edges

Who summons the stars

And the scent of the rose

Who unburdens the sun,

scattering its fiery embers

Her name is Dusk

 

She rustles the bright-eyed creatures

Dark hair falling down down down

In a gown of woad taffeta

She sings to grow the shadows

A smile to melt the cold stare

of all the hardest days

 

Stirring whispers from her mouth,

call out the silent flyers

She makes black holes of the gardens

Tunes the trill strings of the late bird

She closes the sundrops

And cools the parched loam

 

Her sermon is always of endings

As she casts the emerging spirits

She doesn’t fear the hidden worlds

or the transience of her time

As her presence gently hazes

The world is now in darkness 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

An ode to twilight. You bring out so many views of the gentle changes. Years ago when we moved into the country I suddenly realised these flitting flyers in the dusk weren't late flying birds! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you, Rhiannon. Personally it's my favourite time of day, especially if it's very still weather. Maybe the birds are having a last minute change of location for sleep.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

You have filled my mind with beautiful images and a feeling of peace

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you, Di. Thoughts of peace are what we need right now. 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Jane,

this is such an enchanting poem. I think it's one of my favourites. I just love how you've woven each description with lots of love.

Beautiful and one I will come back to read again and again.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi Jenny, thank you for reading and your lovely comment. I think dusk can be rather like a warm hug before the cold of night sets in. I really appreciate your feedback x

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

One of my favourite things is watching a summer evening turn to dusk. This is so beautiful and will be a lovely thing to turn to when, as today, the summer evening is one of belting rain and clouds!

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you airyfairy. Dusk hasn't really turned up this evening has she. On a lovely summer's evening, it's a magic time of day. Hopefully we'll get some more of those soon.

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

What a lovely poem - your words drop like the soft days ending into the balm of night - thank you Jane

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you Dougie, your comment is like a lovely mini poem in itself. smiley

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

This beautiful poem is our Facebook and X Pick of the Day! Please do share if you enjoy it too.

Picture free to use from Wikimedia Commons: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Evening_sky_on_the_caldera_Oia.jpg

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you for pick of the day xx

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Very glad this was chosen, has been in my mind ever since reading

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you for reading Di. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I have no idea why I forgot to leave a comment after reading it yesterday - so glad it was chosen for golden cherries. Dusk at this time of year can be so magical (when not tipping it down)

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Tipping down again now, Insert. Thank you for your comment. Looking better for the ened of the week though, might even see the sunset.smiley

 

Submitted by celticman on

the close of day told in a wonderful way. 

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you celticman. I'm less familiar with the opening of the day, aka, Dawn, she can be brutal. I'd rather be dreaming about Dusk x

 

Submitted by marandina on

"The girl with the softest edges

Who summons the stars.."

The personification of "dusk".

So many inspired, beautiful lines in this like:

"Her sermon is always of endings"

Just gorgeous.

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you so much, Paul.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is our Poem of the Week - Congratulations!

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is our Poem of the Month - Congratulations!

 

Submitted by Turlough on

Great words to suit this special time of day. Calming moments.

I really liked your  

A smile to melt the cold stare

of all the hardest days

as that's exactly how the dusk has made me feel down the years. 

Turlough

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you Turlough for reading and sharing your thoughts. I'm very pleased that the poem resonated with yousmiley.