When Death Stopped By

By Natalia

Wed, 01 Aug 2012
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The aura of his dark cloak
Surrounds me
His deathly voice
Captures me

I have disappeared
I cannot think
As he kisses me
With his shadowy lips

He is everywhere
But yet nowhere
Soon I will perish
In his deadly embrace

He is owerpowering
I am inconsequential
He is evil
I am pure

He will murder me
While I stand by
I will die
As the dead watch on

Oh Father!
You must come
You must save me
From eternal oblivion

Save me
Save me
Do not be too late...

You are too late

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Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Very dark Natalia, but very good, last line pulls you up sharp!

 

Submitted by Natalia on
Yes...it is one of my darker poems.

Natalia :)

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Dramatic and Gothic, Natalia. Much passion in this, and it shows. Look forward to reading more of your work. Tina

 

Submitted by Natalia on
Thank you, Tina!

Natalia :)

Submitted by Bryan Skylar on
I feel the Gothic tones in this poem. There are only two areas where I could see an edit. "Soon I will perish" should be "Soon, I will perish." And where you write "Oh Father" I believe it should be "Oh, Father." Reminds me of Darksiders 2 due out on PS3 and Xbox 360 the 14th. You play as Death himself. Good poem. Bryan

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks very much Bryan! Yes, will make those changes when I have time. Natalia

Natalia :)