DAYDREAMER

By Cavalcader

Sun, 02 Jan 2011
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8 comments
 

I want to be in god's
places of nature
where the light
and warmth so bright

Angel's with smiling faces
butterflies magnificent
tinted wings

I could be called the
painted lady
nocturnal of the night

The waning full moon watching over me
peeping
through the trees

Bees humming a tune
of let there be love
and peace in the world

Rabbits with snow on
their twitching noses
nightinggales singing
all chirping away

Children with bright colour
coats and hats
with skipping ropes
jingle my name

Waterfalls with
tinkling rushing sounds

Sunsets of red
and orange hues
gently emerging down

Low behind the houses
at a blink of an eye
what a lovely sight

I would quickly
take a seat
pick up my pen
start writing again

Of the beauty and things
I have seen
and people I meet

all comments please.

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
There are some lovely images in this poem Julie. I particularly like the last part. There are a couple of typos: angels, faces, rabbits, coats, hats and sunsets. None of these need apostrophes. happy new year!

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new insertponceyfre Thankyou lovely 1st comment. and now corrected what are they called typos: ugh! not bad for an O.A.P aye! HAPPY NEW YEAR to you and all. had bit to muich of our Peach Wine, so sweet, don't feel effects till going home. thankyou. Hope your well, bug is on and off. julie xx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Julie, what a wonderful place you take the reader to, it's a delight to read your work. There is'nt one paticular line I like best, I just love the poem as a whole. Thankyou for taking me to your paradise. Happy New Year to you. Jenny.

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Really enjoyed this one too Julie.:-)

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Skinner_jennifer Hi! wow what a compliment, I did a little giggle cor? I found a bit on back envelope, thought may not done,on hear so re-added it, bingo. did you have a good Christmas and see New Year in. We did for once, daughters christmas day,and invite new year,whoops over done with our Peach wine, I even saw two lights in sky,shouted Ray get camera quick,then formation six above houses, low flying high! no not quite tipsy,real,could be chinese lanterns, maybe fireworks.Great time. Paper says, eclipse to-morrow 7.15am-9am. May be up look if sunny. Hope your well,sorry Editor Tony bad flu. Ray had cough week and cold ok now. I have taken out typos as advised by insetponceyfre, kindly said, definitely reads much better.How are you.Like reading yours and all, amazing kinds of ideas and works authors. Mind doesn't come out want it. Happy New Year to you and all. julie xxxx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new fatboy 74 Missed your comment,sorry. Thanks, glad you liked it. I believe there is a butterfly called The Painted Lady.Beautiful colours. Also word in dictionary says, diurnal=erect winged insect. But big name,I am learning? Happy new year. julie xx

Submitted by Nolan on
Julie excellent! Happiness! & Nolan!
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Nolan H! Happy better new year Glad you liked it.I to amze my self sometimes read it again. been looking for your great poems. How are you.Well done poem kind of called Breathless (IP) wow within half an hour a cherry appeared quickest ever.But now have added bit to it,hope not over done it.Great night London Editor AbcTales t.cook (Tony) and author's I met,and gobsmacked read two.Hectic at first Gatwick tanoy suit case on front of train given out,so closed my eyes and prayed safety and passengers,within 5 minutes tanoy voice again not as bad as thought and current won't have to be cut off,train can move on.phew! Under ground tube chnaged lost Ray out on road of exit shoutimng for him,was behind me thank goodness don't travel that far on own.The platform as jump of tube train some in a circle getting pass nearly fall on the track,man shouted out the way and me mind please get by. I wondered where you got to on here. julie xx