An unknown soldier

Cherry

By seashore

Wed, 25 May 2011
  • 9872 reads
39 comments
 

I think I'm a bit in love
with you

you, who I see
through mist
and rubble

and smoke-filled
craters

walking towards me
dusty-uniformed

glowing brightly
your Officer's cap
angled just right

smiling as you
pick me up
and run with me

through red-dotted fields
newly sprouting
over the scars

of battle-grounds
already passed
into a sunset future

where the child-me
who has no name
no relatives

would time-travel
just to meet you
to know you

to love and be loved
and to have you
live your short life

all over again
only this time
with no fighting
no wars

just come
to me through
the mist and rubble

and take me to
the grassy banks
of Fromelles

from whence you
came in dreams
one night

allow me that

Certificate 12
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by maisie on
exciting start.. ......... and you travel in time from the adult to the child, in an attempt to see this person from the past. my grandfather served both ww's so this is poignant for me too.

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello seashore, this is absolutely beautiful, I think it's one of my favourites of yours. You have captured a moment in time so well, a great tribute to the man in the photo. Thankyou for the read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
wonderful stuff - probably my second fav of yours. Perfectly pitched. :-)

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you Maisie and Jenny for the positive feedback - very much appreciated.

Submitted by seashore on
Hi Fatboy - thanks as always for your comments. Now I'm wondering which was the first fav?? Thanks eds for the cherry!

Submitted by fatboy74 on
resurrection is my fave, as pop larkin used to say it's purfick - this poem runs it very close. :-)

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Congratulations on the cherries sea-shore, well deserved. Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks for responding, fb! Do you know Resurrection and this one came from nowhere.....a first line and the rest followed whereas I have more than a few that have been subjected to umpteen drafts (sometimes to no avail and abandoned). I have several like that in a folder right now that just refuse to work... That's really helpful to know - thanks again and hope things aren't too stressful re the moving scene.

Submitted by seashore on
Jenny - thank you. That's really kind.

Submitted by Overthetop1 on
Beautifully written and very poignant.

Overthetop1

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks very much OTT

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes this is very beautiful Coral- I like the way you travel from the battlefield to the childs thoughts and "into the sunset future"- perfect line. ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you so much for saying that, Pia. Coral x

Submitted by seashore on
Many thanks, SC.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Wonderful, Coral. Definitely one of your many best;-) Tina

 

Submitted by seashore on
That's really kind of you to say that, Tina - I really appreciate it. Many thanks.

Submitted by shoe on
This is stunning, I love every bit!

 

Submitted by seashore on
Really appreciate that shoe - lots of thanks!

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new seashore Really enjoyed descriptions of the unknown Soldier from the war, from a dream and photo. well done on the cherry! I remember a song always. By "Ann Shelton" younger Run to the station jump on the train March at the double down lover's lane etc; julie xx Cont where the roses entwine lay down your arms and surrender to mine I remember bit about war. and family some in..

Submitted by seashore on
That song does sound vaguely familiar, Julie - thanks for that and letting me know your thoughts. I do appreciate it.

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
So beautiful and dreamy, Coral - I honestly can't pick a favourite bit, it's all just stunning and as Jenny said, a great tribute. Many congrats on the cherries :) Rachel xx

Submitted by seashore on
Hi again Rachel! Thanks for that and all your comments on my work - you're clearly a very `giving' person which I feel sure makes you a great Mum. Thanks again, Coral xx

Submitted by Geoffrey on
I don't know what to say. The problem with your work is that by the time I read it 20 people have already said what there is to say. Well done on cherry, perhaps the harvest is coming after the rain!

Submitted by seashore on
Well you have managed to say something after all and thanks for that, Geoff. Your half-century is in bud surely!

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks so much jib for reading and kind comment. I know what you mean - I've done the same in the past to no avail so not sure how I managed this one!

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you so much for reading and for the lovely comment, Nathan. Really appreciated.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
oh so gooood!

Submitted by seashore on
Oh so welcome comment - thanks Jose!

Submitted by celticman on
Nicely done. A dream like movement that was completely real.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks celticman - what a lovely comment.

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