A daughter's Lament

Good story, Jenny with some wonderful vivid imagery and memorable lines. I especially liked: "a candle black upon her lap..." "a tear runs down her Mother's grave," "as tracing the candle through time and space" aswell as the whole of the last stanza: as Sun sets low on this Halloween she decorates grave fit for a Queen, then stares up into the darker sky... many blessings on this Samhain Nigh. Really captured the imagination. I thought the rhythm and syntax in the first two lines was great; Shakespeare uses that same sort of rhythm and syntax in Macbeth within the speech of the three witches, ("When shall we three meet again; in thunder, lightning or in rain" etcetera) and, because it resembles the rhythm of an incantation, it really adds to the magic and mystery. The Crone of old she Winter's well as in the Forest she would dwell... There was also a genuine air of melancholy within the poem and I really felt sympathy for the witch. It was a good way of teaching people about Samhain and its importance. JoHn - "Ex amore victoria". ("From love comes victory".)

I agree with wellwisher - some fantastic lines in this Jenny - well done

And a very happy Samhain, to you, Jenny. The first of November tomorrow, and winter surely does start then. Hope you are keeping warm and cosy this Halloween night;-) Very much enjoyed your poem, and the last stanza is truly magical;-) Tina

new Skinner-jennifer Thoroughly enjoyed magical mystery poem. I feel the word's intending more. Someone may lost someone. Very cleverly written. Full of images mentioned. Can I ask if Samhain means=Halloween? Well mine wnet snooker,and done up 1o bags, of toffee's, lot's squeals and screams, right by the window of children, very youn so dark, with an adult. Local park had a Halloween do. None came this year, so mine can chew away toffees. Glad you had a good time. Just had faithful in the comfort cat black! I can see one coming..... julie xx

New Skinner_jennifer Hi! So kind of you to explain. As know someone lost mum, says in a poem. Not sure who it was. I quite often don't get poems, how I think, turn it into soemthing else wrong? But you have written this so well. Laugh not our cat, 'Green Eyes' Jazz. Oh! dear mentioned him again. Well get scared fireworks, memories! The noise once, went special place? so bad found out witches coven, down in town. Reckoned spooky. As not spiritual. Take care. julie xx

Catching up on a bit of reading and found this Jenny - really like it and agree with the others - well done. :-)

Am glad it so important to other people Jenny :) K

Hello Jenny, I thought this was absolutely wonderful. Like Julie, I didn't know what Samhain meant but I loved the poem just the same. I always find your poems accessible so that is probably why I enjoy them so. Moya

Hii Jenny abpout time I got on a computer! Some year carve out pumkin or sweed and put candle in it Sowhin for me is also about my mama, my gran and greatgrans up to atleast greatx5 and what they did for a lives wer about nature and magic That is time for me to have emptied the veg patch exept for leeks, this year wehave a glasshouse with tomatoes and chillis!

doesnt need to be expensive! you only need one chili or tomato fruit and take out the seeds and put them in a sandwitch bag in an airing cupboard or somewhere warm and dark for a few day or did you mean greenhouse you can make one out of builders pallets wood and use plastic bags or anything like that Ii even made a little pictures out of qualty street wrappers for on the door Now we finally have a metal frame with glass in and most of was free! I still prefer the wonky wooden handmade one for some silly soft sentimental reason! x K