So To Drift

Cherry

By skinner_jennifer

Tue, 04 Jun 2019
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17 comments
 

 

Seems so long ago now, parched as we were in

Scorching heat - followed coastal path of 

Seclusion, quenching thirst I cupped my hands,

 

Reached down to where water springs  from

Out of ground...shed a few tears at view of

Sparkling sea,

 

Nirvana found my mind so buoyant at nature's

Purest sounds. Striving on now leaves me

Breathless, delight in lyrical gratification reached,

 

Created by emotion of ocean's muse...when sinewy

Vibrations resound in tumbling forceful waves,

Then! Echoes of this poem drift on shores of papery white.

 

Picture by pixabay free images.

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

The sea is a work of art isn't it. I am overdue a visit to the coast. I love the close arrangement of this piece and 'sinewy vibrations and tumbling forceful waves' and the echoes on shores of papery white. Beautiful.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You seem to convey that warmth and sparkling, rumbling ocean, and white sands. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by celticman on

peaks and troughs, like life, I guess. 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I like the line breaks in the first verse, like your tongue is so dry you can hardly get the words out? And when you find the spring the lines flow free. And then salt tears and the salt sea, joining you with the water in another way. Then so clever, you tip the poem up, so instead of walking to reach the sea you are writing, and the last wonderful image of the page/screen being like a beach, and I realise your short verses are like little waves lapping and there's the lovely relaxed happy feeling of walking in bare foot in soft sand at the edge of the sea even as you can hear much fiercer waves rumbling over rocks a bit away

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Jane,

I too am overdue for a trip to the ocean, it's been at least twenty years, so I know exactly where you're coming from.

Thank you for stopping by to read and let me know you enjoyed.

I wasn't too happy with the layout of the poem, so have played around with it a bit and am much happier now.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

it seems so long ago since we took that coastal walk from St Ives up and over many hills that seemed to go on endlessly, I wanted to capture the memory of that day. We never realised just how far we were going to walk and never took any water, so it was a relief to find an underground spring flowing out the side of the cliff which was so refreshing.

Many thanks for stopping by to read and share your thoughts.

I've changed the layout of this poem, hope it reads better now.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts Jack.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hello Di,

I've changed the layout of this poem. I wasn't that happy with the way it read. Hope it hasn't ruined what you were seeing in my poem. Cornwall has so many amazing coastal walks, This was about a very long walk from St Ives where we were staying.

I love the way the sea laps the rocks, especially at somewhere like Lands End, but then a bit further and you have a calm ocean that sparkles in the sunshine of a hot day, like the one we decided to ramble on. I remember saying to my partner: 'When are we getting to our destination?' Which was a pub. He kept saying: 'Just over the next hil.' Well five hours later after walking over many hills, we arrived and boy did we enjoy that first drink and a meal, it was well worth the walk. Thankfully we caught the bus back to St Ives, I couldn't have faced that walk back.

I'm so grateful to you for reading because you always get what I'm trying to convey, as I've said so many times before.

Many thanks.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I was thinking of Cornwall as I was reading it? I went there when 19 on a trip with art college - the longest time I had stayed so long away from my family. It was amazing! I felt like a seagull :0) We stayed in St Ives, too, and went out walking every day, (in Spring as cheaper and it was FREEZING) So many of the rocks are like sculptures aren't they? Everything there seems extra vivid, I guess it's the light people talk about, it did make me want to make pictures wherever I looked. It has made the same strong impression on you (thinking of Veil of Light and many of your poems about the sea)

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I must have missed this one first time around - what a wonderfully vivid picture you paint!

do you mean seclusion in the third line?

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thanks for coming back and commenting Di. St Ives is such a pretty place with it's harbour. I think it has such amazing character and charm which I'm sure you must have felt when you went there.

I agree about the rocks looking like sculptures and the seascape has captured many an artist to paint. Last time we went, there was an artist shop showing paintings of St Ives and other Cornish harbours. Some of the side streets also provide artist with a home and scope for their work and the freedom to have such beauty on your doorstep must be so inspiring.

Hope you get back to Cornwall one day and enjoy its rugged walks.

Thanks again for returning to this poem and I appreciate you reading my other poems too.

Kind regards,

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hello insert,

oops! Yes you're right. Thank you for letting me know.

That's okay about missing it, I've re-written the poem because I wasn't happy with the layout the first time around.

So glad I was able to convey the vividness of this one and thank you again for your welcome shared thoughts.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Just discovered the cherries on this poem. Made my day. Thank you so much editors.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by TonyC25 on

Shining write really enjoyed brings back memories

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I'm glad I could bring back memories for you Tony.

Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed, much appreciated.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Jenny

 

I am going way back to find more of your work to read. This is lovely - such long and emotive words.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you for taking the time to read, it's always such a pleasure to recieve your comments Jean.

Jenny. smiley