Raef_Boylan
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Story | Shoelaces | Insertponceyfre... | 18 | 7 years 5 months ago |
Story | Nature in the City | Ray Schaufeld | 10 | 7 years 10 months ago |
Story | Being opinionated is useful. | Matthew_J_Barton | 4 | 9 years 1 month ago |
Story | One Man In A Crowd Of Hundreds | Matthew_J_Barton | 2 | 9 years 1 month ago |
Story | Immaterial | Raef_Boylan | 8 | 9 years 11 months ago |
Story | Circumstances | MAGAMED.MT | 2 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | Nights Out | Raef_Boylan | 8 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | SHRUBS (Part Two) | Raef_Boylan | 4 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | SHRUBS (Part One) | Raef_Boylan | 4 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | Art Deco Child | Ed Crane | 8 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | Out of Control | CCC | 2 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | Out of Control-5 | CCC | 2 | 10 years 5 months ago |
Story | Brought Up Gay | Matthew_J_Barton | 7 | 11 years 1 month ago |
Story | Elemental | samanthacampbell123 | 1 | 11 years 1 month ago |
Story | Right the wrong. | samanthacampbell123 | 1 | 11 years 1 month ago |
Story | One of Those Moments | Raef_Boylan | 0 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | THE SAND WITCH | Linda Wigzell Cress | 20 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | Another Day | Raef_Boylan | 2 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | One day in a joke shop | well-wisher | 3 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | Perry | Raef_Boylan | 6 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | September Comes | well-wisher | 2 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | The Voices Inside My Head Are Not My Own | celticman | 6 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | Me, Myself, I and my Other | Matthew_J_Barton | 1 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | Slow Motion | Canonette | 7 | 11 years 4 months ago |
Story | Fanciful Spoons | itsnotnatural | 3 | 11 years 5 months ago |
I liked the style of this,
Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014
I liked the style of this, lots of things given new character through metaphor. The only constructive criticism I can think to offer is regarding the use of "grow" in the first stanza when you also have "growing up" - is there another, more...
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This flows well and the
Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014
This flows well and the narrative voice is solid - you've created a protagonist people can relate to. I suggest going through and checking your tenses, as it flicks from past to present a few times: "place was packed...She wore (past)...she jumps...
Read full commentPosted in Out of Control-5
This is a solid poem,
Posted on Sat, 24 Aug 2013
This is a solid poem, skilfully structured with a great rhythm. The little bits of green and untouched nature scattered around a city can jump out at us all the more because of their surroundings; I think concrete provides a good contrast and...
Read full commentPosted in Nature in the City
This captures the fear and
Posted on Tue, 15 Nov 2011
This captures the fear and uncertainty of being human really well. There are no warranties for life, no way to peek a few chapters ahead and decide whether to stick with this book or discard it for something more promising. The future can eat us...
Read full commentPosted in Me, Myself, I and my Other