Warren didn't know why Mirra had made him the Lillie girls mentor. She was a simple little blonde girl, tall and thin, her limbs were very stick like...
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Oh wow, this piece looks
Posted on Sun, 26 Oct 2014
Oh wow, this piece looks great now, much more structured, it's amazing what centering a piece can do (even better than my original suggestion)... great job! It is an awesome song as well :)
Great story for the holiday, it was creepy and eerie giving me chills a few times. Great Job! I noticed you need a space between 'and' and 'I' towards the top, in the sentence, "He bellowed and I chuckled."
Oh wow, this piece looks
Posted on Sun, 26 Oct 2014
Oh wow, this piece looks great now, much more structured, it's amazing what centering a piece can do (even better than my original suggestion)... great job! It is an awesome song as well :)
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Even I shed a tear for this...
Posted on Sun, 26 Oct 2014
Heart wrenching, shocking even, I had no idea that that was where we were heading. Great job!
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Great story for the holiday,
Posted on Sat, 18 Oct 2014
Great story for the holiday, it was creepy and eerie giving me chills a few times. Great Job! I noticed you need a space between 'and' and 'I' towards the top, in the sentence, "He bellowed and I chuckled."
Read full commentPosted in Edge of Nightmares