Widowed!
By threeleafshamrock
Fri, 19 Jun 2009
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Wakes, rolls from the bed;
down the hall, into the kitchen.
The kettle whistles.
The porridge spits steam
from exploding bubbles.
Looks at the radio but defers;
music would be like forgetting,
like disrespect, like coping.
Four place settings still;
three fragile hearts,
two, too young to be shattered,
one too old to repair.
No longer two against the world;
the world versus one,
the world winning, laughing.
A tear on the hob, dancing.
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Hi Chris. Love the "tear on
Hi Chris. Love the "tear on the hob, dancing!" line - can just picure it - and the exploding porridge bubbles too. Well observed and related. Nice one. ;-)
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Like this... A bit of
Permalink Submitted by russiandoll on
Like this...
A bit of teacherly scrawling here from me;
Is 'verses' meant to be versus? I'd be tempted to try it without the exclamation marks too, I think that might bring the poignancy of the subject more to the fore, if that's what you're after.
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Gentle and pignant. Lovely
Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on
Gentle and pignant. Lovely poem Chris. sarah x
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Agree about the exclamation
Agree about the exclamation marks. A very good succession of images.
Ewan
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