Quietly the arms of a creation reaches forward..
By Beeme
Fri, 10 Jul 2009
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Quietly the arms of a creation reaches
forward amidst a room thrust into the
silence of existence. Each of its bones
working in unison, raising its arms and
placing its metallic hands into another's-
touching but with no spark of emotion.
Quickly I realize that my peach arms are
so still that even I feel robotic...
Through the mist of perfection I am sending
messages of hope into its grey telescopic eyes,
from my own. The next person whispers rumours
of humanity.
I wait,
to hold its lonely armoured body.
I stretch,
to hold its fingertips and fold its stiff hands into
my own.
Begging to install some love.
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Good effort Beeme on a tough
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Good effort Beeme on a tough assignment. I'll go and read Jupe's now....I bet it's about 3 pages long lol.
Chris ;)
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Congrats on your joint win
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Congrats on your joint win Beeme!
Some of the lines here as so delicious, my favourites:
'The next person whispers rumours
of humanity.'
and
'I stretch,
to hold it's fingertips and fold it's stiff hands into
my own.'
Well done, you've been producing some superb stuff recently!
Magic xxx
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Congratulations mate,I've
Congratulations mate,I've congratulated all of you on Jupiters message but not on yours. Just thought I would let you know, you produced some brilliant work
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Yo Beeme - you really rose
Yo Beeme - you really rose to the challenge as I hoped you would. Check out these comments above - superb achievement! Well done ;-)
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Congrats on your joint win,
Congrats on your joint win, Beeme.:-)
A small point, if you don't mind me mentioning it - the possessive pronoun should be its not it's. It's is the contracted version of it is.
I thoroughly enjoyed this, and that last line was particularly clever, I thought. Looking forward to reading more. :-)
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