I TRY

By Cavalcader

Sun, 08 Aug 2010
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13 comments
 

I try to put colour in all I do
now I have imagination
to make it all interesting
but can't do punctuation
A dot. a comma, "Speech" mark to
there and their's
no wonder I have grey hair

But when I got my 1st cherry
on the screen shining all aglow
I wanted a real one

I think it was MistakenMagic
on the AbcTales who told me how
to get the cherry! brooch

There's Silver-Spun-Sand
and Jennifer to
Nolan,Trevor,Beeme
Kheldar,and other's
if I am blue

I have and always wear the brooch
when out
people like
and question me
and I tell what it's about
the Abc
now charity shop a cherry bag
to match perfectly

I know I am a trying? person
especially if I am not certain
as that is the way I am made
my words used to come out back to front
but look what I can do to-day

The Editor t.cook AbcTales (Tony)
great help
says "Keep on interacting
and writing and reading other's

for clues and grammar
most of all
just be yourself
but really I don't
always know!
what I am talking about
sometimes it shows?

Certificate U
Story
Humour

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Julie, I have made a fool of myself so many times, since writing on ABC Tales, so don't worry. I find all the punctuations baffeling aswell. Sometimes when I am writing, I get so carried away, I even spell words wrong, even though I read it three times back over, I still read it wrong. I think an artist of any description should be able to free write, the way they feel comfortable, just like painting scribbles that sell for thousands of pounds, What is right for one, is not always right for another. I find it very hard to critisize other peoples work, mainly because I am not qualified. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
Julie I think your poems are truly among the most colourful and imaginative on here and I always enjoy reading them. I love the story of the cherry brooch! I find it hard to criticise other people's work too, but I know how useful it can be, as I'm always grateful if someone tells me when something I've written doesn't work for them - it's the best way of learning how to get better. It's always easier to spot someone else's mistakes too. I can read through my things a million times and miss something really basic.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
insertponceyfre What wonderful comment. You and some bringing tears, truly to my eyes. Just read your lovely story. and all brill; issue 21 AbcTales Love them all, especially concentrate that long now, to read fascinating poe'ts and stories. julie xx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Insertponceyfre Cor,thankyou,so much to me some and most damn,good other's,when I read,I feel absolutely are true,but not always.Never been abroad,so I can't answer on lovely one of MistakenMagic's. New author's so good and just started. I feel inadequte,my personality anything is if can grasp it try,if I can't confuse.I fully understand all that help me,plus I am getting on.Life,I have been to the bottom of the sea,in everything and back.So all this bran new to me.I stand corrected,and so much help.But now can do,and have many things done,taken many years, but again only one teacher,that'sme,sing,dance,words,sentences,poems,pictures,homeless writing group all did,all kinds of groups or whatever joined.I know it is away of learning and I appreciate all.Also mine is re-tired,watches t.v. I am trying to concentrate, hit wrong button keys. Like knitting patterns,sums only basic,can I do,or leave it. I love all the help,but to many in one go,I have had it,to re-correct.I can take criticism course, but my head goes,if can't grasp something,at school receipes,were recipes I would say.And Bunny laid an egg, instead of Bunny laid dead.And as things happened in life,all this is expanding me,when I can do.I couldn,t do square feet and inches? And my past one couldn't do anything at all? Nothing? Count on you all as My friend's. Thankyou so much. julie xx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New skinner_Jennifer Thankyou,I am exactly the same, but some of you new ones,so good makes me feel a bit inadequate. I can take comment,and criticism. Not good at giving it,so look for contents and reply on that.Some are so damn good I think are real,then I find there not. Love reading all,and help.Just had to jump of here cos,he wanted his computer quickly,I could ring his neck.Yes,practice and interacting and reading great. But for those who can do excellent punctuation great,but for me,like banging my head agaist brick wall. I used to say recipes and not receipes,and story Bunny laid an egg,instead bunny laid dead. and in life,awful things happen,one is lucky one can speak,my words used come out back to front if agitated etc; made it worse hubby and daught; laugh. couldn't understand,it's when I know what I mean and through all adversity agitated and the past, they are clever cloga, all this helps me so much.Interacting,using the mind,and expanding it. julie xx

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
This is a wonderful poem, Julie! And I'm so glad myself and ABC had helped you :) You know I bought a cherry keyring to put on my schoolbag because of ABCtales so it's lovely to hear someone else has done something similar ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New MistakenMagic I would like to opologise,I loved your poem,and congrstulations on it getting a cherry! well deserved. But as I don't know about the country or ever been abroad,I couldn't comment on excellent way the poet did it you. Well I am 100% it was you, who told me about getting the cherry! brooch. As Ray was looking to for me.Well cherries, now are coming out in different things,dresses far to short,skirts. No I haven't seen a keyring yet?What amazing words, you have printed skilled poet. I actually met Editor of AbcTales tcook (Tony) he is a very kind person,and delivered my 2 AbcTale Mugs,No cherry! on, maybe we could paint one on. Has been so helpful, and you and like some listed in this poem. I hated to comment back never done, so I make it into, like I am an agony aunt. But if suggestions on punctuations, take on board will try, but can't take to much. But gobsmacked at readings and comments.Well if you here or see any more cherries! in whatever, please let me know.And must admit, pills, take away the mind, body, and time of day. After everything.I put them down the pan, 6 years on. Not now, 16 years of my life I lost. That's another private story. But we can empathise and help other's,like Editor and team,and ABCtales helped me. I am truly surprised I am on here! Have a good week-end. Always look foreward reading your's and all. But I had read so many books eventually on god's healing touch,and people's lives and essential prayers.If you understand me. But achieved and done so many wonderful things. It is in giving we receive. Although I still can't go as far as I like. But to do and be involved and try so many things, and my 1st cherry! I screamed? I have seen a Knitted cherry! brooch bit xpensive.Mine! See when I had to cook for four, here each one didn't like something, peas,or roast potatoes,skin on the custard.etc; my poor head spin,so I'd pack up and leave it. Same with punctuation so this is expressing me, not to be rude in anyway.To anyone. The mind is a very complicated thing, we all think and receive things,and feel differently.Horse going called "Cherry B" came no where,but two did buy names of Poet and Poetry something well well I didn't do, did win and quite a few wod Magic? in I have heard of a Cherry! user I think it's a truck of some kind or lorry, goes around like a crane,do you know what it is for? Quite often, names horses are anmes and Title of poems I have done,or on here1' and quite a few with Magic! word's in Win. Bless you + have a good wee-end. I will after those amazing compliments and words from you.Wow. But young cook for 12. we all made to eat the same. Roast dinner's, yorkshire pudding's, some jam or treacle on. May not get cake till week end. etc; julie xx Have agood week-end. Julie xx

Submitted by Ninny Pins on
I think this poem is amazing! Your really good at this i'm going to get my english teacher to read it out in english! Thanks for the lovely comment on the tale of nin! Jay x :)

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Ninny Pins How kind of your great comment. I don't deserve, just trying not sure if it's up to showing your English teacher, up to you, it was just how I felt, letting of steam, I think they call it. Do write more, I am waiting. Are you new. If you do let me know the result. Be interesting. julie x

Submitted by tcook on
A lovely poem, Julie, and I am so glad that ABCtales has been a comfort and help to you. It seems to mean a lot to so many people and that's what keeps me going! Thankyou for telling us your feelings.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
tcook Editor AbcTales August 10 2010 Thankyou so much for all your kind help, and your comforting reply, that is what I can connect with is the empathy. I could put words on here, nobody would understand, unless medically trained not going to. Be too many Q asked. Have to be careful. I do feel, that and many will you deserve the cherry! for AbcTales and Editor AbcTales voted top by makerUser was it, you work so hard for all. Sometimes I now get carried away, replying to comments, but some like me to answer properly. It is amazing the different Titles, and stories poems and subjects. Always something different, happy sad knowledgeable. Quirky. Should I send other version "The Big Issue" to you 8 taken out, much better. I have to fight myself inside sometimes. but I get there, thanks to you and all. I have two very clever clogs here, don't even read any my work. Thankyou so much Tony.Hope all is going well for you. I wasn't allowed any stress of any kind bring pain, then 1000 times worse. But I am free. I looked in dictionary, after rushed home not, there until a kind of counselling was told 2 words. After 16 years of nothing could do. I put to much on here sometimes now. Do you think where have cherry! mugs can be put on. But richly blessed by god healing place. Don't I go on. Now I say about my poems but not a poet. I cannot, put all my feelings on, now I have them. julie xx AbcTales

Submitted by Beeme on
A cherry brooch, I need to get myself one of those ;) I really used to struggle with puncuation, line breaks in particular, ABC tales really helped. I just kept trying and had the support of many really nice and talented poets on here, like Magic :) You are trying hard, its evident in all of your recent poems. To me your poetry is always a pleasure to read, because it is so honest and imaginative. Love Beeme xx

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Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme, I know the feeling, what you mean, me to, I nearly gave up once as can only do a bit. No sometimes my poem's are a mess, but you and all help, and interacting with other's and listening and doing up to a limit? As our Editor tcook tony said, to try, great help from all, mix in and listen watch interact other's mine are mostly therapy, poem's now, like MistakenMagic. Love to make them happy, interesting knowledgeable, when life is so sad, plus world and for people. sometimes. All therapy. Before I came on here, done some no punctuation and things, then a web; comp tried, called one on here "The Mouse" cos not touched a computer, so complicated to work. all the best, jullie xx