High tide

By Highhat

Fri, 08 Feb 2013
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The high tide washes over the muddy swamp
Concealing sand crabs and oyster-encrusted rocks
Yet I still see the murk
Knowing how the mangrove roots appear at low tide
How the oysters are revealed and the crabs scuttle
Sifting mud to sand
The difference between high and low
Is only a moon’s moment away
Pulling, jabbing
And drawing me towards the deep
There is no clear view as the water and mud blend
Carrying me away in my little lonely canoe
Afraid to be caught in a whirlpool
To be swallowed
Scared stiff to drown in these depths
not knowing how to swim
in this moving stream

Certificate U
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
thank you PG- are you posting the Robin stories again? ;)Pia

Submitted by Hades502 on
Nice visual images you describe. GGHades502

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Submitted by celticman on
The difference between high and low Is only a moon’s moment away I think this is wondeful and as an aphorim on the nature of time and being this about sums everything up. Well done. ~ a triumph.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Glad you liked them GGHades- ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Lovely words- thank you very much Celtic- means much to me coming from the master of metaphors himself. ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
A very visual piece, Pia. I felt it - if that makes sense.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
I can see what seashore means, you've caught the visual and the feelings when in the place. Swimming would be difficult there even with a life belt I should think. Is this from Australia? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I'm glad you felt it Seashore- that makes perfect sense and that is a compliment. Thank you. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes Rhiannon - the nature descriptions are Australian. That place is close to my heart as this poem also is. Thank you for reading. Really makes my day. ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Definitely a place you take the reader too Pia, with so many great images, but also quite a frightening experience, I can imagine. Thankyou for sharing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks for reading Jenny-life is frightening at times I think. ;)Pia

Submitted by The Walrus on
This reminds me of an unspoiled stretch of the Jamaican coast we spent a couple of days exploring in 2009, Pia. Aah, memories.....

Submitted by moonphish on
a moon's moment away...that line stopped me in my tracks, beautiful poem, Pia :) - alvin

Submitted by Highhat on
Glad I could bring back memories for you Walrus- hopefully pleasant. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Alvin.. ;)Pia

Submitted by MS on
Good poem pia, the moon stuff is inspired.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks for reading and commenting MS- much appreciated. ;)Pia