Event

Cherry

By Parson Thru

Sun, 24 Aug 2014
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13 comments
 

We stood beside the harbour 
The light was low and phosphorescent

Across the reach of sea and sky something happened
Unnatural and alien
Crashing through the scene like butcher’s knife through masterpiece
Slashed from top to bottom
Too quick for human eyes

But in its wake, red lights danced like fireflies in the night
Springing from a distant source
A cratered ocean far beyond the joining of horizons

We watched

A shape, white and indistinct began to form
Flattened to the curvature by friendly gravitation

It grew, billowing
Until it was upon us
Steaming ocean, pressing in

We fell into an empty shed
And there we slept.

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Comments

Submitted by Tom Brown on

It sounds as if you witnessed some extraodinary natural phenominon. Great poem but the last two lines seem out of place. Or is it resignation? Do you simply describe the inevitable? Quite clever I'd say.

Enjoyed it. Tom

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you Tom. So glad you enjoyed it. Those last two lines. Resignation. Maybe that's it.

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Submitted by VeraClark on

Love this Parson, its strength is in your reader not knowing and that ambivalence lends such possibility. That it is sea bound gave me a shiver, too many unknowns out there. The statemented style brings impact and  your visuals are sharp. It doesn't feel it needs full stops every line. You can be stubborn about this, it is after all your piece but if you take some out, your tension soup gets thicker.

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Fantastic advice VC. Thank you for taking the time and caring. I read it with Richard Burton in my head and it might have worked. Thank you so much.

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Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you cherry picker.

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Submitted by Philip Sidney on

A tsunami of mystery.  I like that it ends in peace, the shed is most mysterious.

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Everything ends in peace. Glad you liked it Philip.

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Submitted by Bee on

And I liked it very much, too.

Bee

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thank you very much Bee. Hope you are enjoying the Bank Holiday.

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Submitted by Bee on

I am now. I'd forgotten it was a bank holiday. Should have known when I saw it raining!

Have a good one!

Bee xx

 

Bee

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Time to take the honey off the hives. Or would be if we still had them. They buzzed off. Enjoy your day, Bee. Xx

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Submitted by Geoff Smith on

not sure i understood it completely, but definitely liked it

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Thanks, Jasper.  I wrote something similar a few years ago.  Dreams are as much a part of our lived experience as anything we do out of bed.  As valid as anything experienced while awake - maybe even more so.

Parson Thru