September

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 23 Sep 2015
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21 comments
 

continuing the series on the months inspired by Eifion Wyn’s series in Welsh:

Crisp, dewy morning,
glittering webs festoon
and decorate the hedgerows;

shortening days, but often
a dazzling afternoon –
watch weary children drag
homeward, morning’s sweatshirt,
stuffed in schoolwork bag;

swallows, martins skim around
– last long feast, before
the journey massive, southward bound,
withdrawing from this scene
of cooling, wilting – tinging
autumn hues emerging;
rowan berries brightly glow,
crane flies flutter, fluster, blunder;

tractors, trailers trundle
down the lanes, the traffic slow:
potatoes scooped from under earth
(crisp packets soon to fill?),
apple orchards yield their worth
for bowl or pie or cider mill.

 

Certificate U
Poem
The Months of the Year
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Gosh, Rhiannon...you have just described exactly what is going on in my neck of the woods...right down to those apples which I have a glut of, plus pears.  Mind you, the wasps have got to a lot of them first.  We also have a bumper crop of potatoes this year, and they are gorgeous. So very buttery.  The martins, swifts and swallows are very active here, too.  Especially late afternoon scooping up all the flies, but I guess, as you say, they will be starting their long journey any day now.  I am looking for them  to gather on the power lines which is what they normally do when they are ready for the off.  I love too, your picture of the Rowan berries.  I don't have too many of those, but I do have masses of giant rosehips from my Rose Rugosas, and as illustrated by your photo, that red makes a wonderful splash against the green and the blue.

Finally, the line about the kids and those sweatshirts really made me smile.  So very true...as they walk passed my front garden each day at 3.45 after being dropped off by the school bus.

Gosh, and I forgot to mention those pesky crane flies.  Can't stand them when they fly around indoorssmiley Some wonderful aliteration in this line, and they certainly do fluster, flutter, blunder.

Really enjoyed this lovely poem, Rhiannon.  One of my many favourites of yours.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tina. And I have enjoyed reading about your surrounding at this time, very much. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is so beautiful Rhiannon, you've captured natures bounty of the season so well. But then I love coming on these picturesque journeys with you.

By the way, loved the picture too.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Glad to have given you that enjoyment, Jenny, by words and picture! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I'm really enjoying this series Rhiannon - each as good as the last!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you so much, insert. Really appreciate that. They take quite a lot of work, and thought! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

Another beauty!

Lessens the sadness of summers departure!!!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

That's a really nice thing to say, Terry! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

So evocative!  Puts me in the mood for a crisp apple.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I hope you find one that's as enjoyable as that sounds! Potatoes and apples are a big farming produce around Herefordshire. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by tibi popovici on

What a great description, I almost can feel the taste of the the ripe fruits. I think the cherries are matching perfectly on this poem :)

T.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for your appreciation, Titi. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Such a great picture - almost unbearable to know another season is ending.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Pat. It's been quite fulfilling to try to catch the main movements of each month before it's gone, and so the seasons move. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by EB on

So much movement in this piece. You have captured well the turn of season in this colorful poem.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, very much for that feedback. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Another cracking poem in your series about the months and their attributes. It is a rich descriptive piece and as crisp as the dewy morning you so aptly describe in your opening stanza. It is skillfully written and contains a lot of clever alliterations. Very enjoyable. Thoroughly worthy of the cherries.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you very much, Luigi. I appreciate that, and your eye for noticing the detail of alliteration etc. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

This is a very lovely word picture of the month.  I really do think you should make room on your calendar for your poetry. Make the numbers smaller.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jean. We did put some verse on the calendar last year, and I've been wondering if these 'month verses' would be suitable this time. Must start giving thought to 'October'! regards, Rhiannon