Day of contrasts

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 27 Nov 2015
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16 comments
 

This I found, a bit uncompleted, from a couple of years ago.

as requested below – https://soundcloud.com/rhiannon-weber/day-of-contrasts

The morning was wet,
as wet as you get –
torrential rain
slamming, drumming,
making puddles to paddle.
We need to take the lady
from her house
for a hospital appointment –
door-to-door –
not much more than half a mile,
but in and out of a car
can seem very far
when you’re 94
and can no longer dash
through the downfall and splash.

Then free for the afternoon –
what should we do?
a misty ride, then lunch for two …

the rain has stopped,
the grass is bright,
blue sky, leaves fly
refreshing wind blows by.

Find a lovely spot to walk, and talk
leafy carpet under beech trees, crunches,
sparkling Wye far below
viewed through autumnal branches.

Over wet soggy grass,
through avenue of trees,
flocks of birds flit by
but wont sit still
for us to identify.
home we ride,
the countryside
not now in that shroud
of mist and low cloud.

 

Certificate U
Poem
Families
Nature
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Really tells the story of the day - and scenery. Could you do a recording of this one, Rhiannon? It would work so well with all those rhymes. I'd love to hear you read it. 

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Bee. And I will see what I can do – I could do with recording and uploading again before I forget the 'how' I suppose! Rhiannon

I'll put a comment on here if I manage it!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Well, managed it! Good practise. I hope it proves up to your expectations. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

You have a lovely voice and way of reading, Rhiannon. So glad you managed the recording, I really enjoyed listening. 

Bee

Submitted by Angela McCrimmon on

I agree. I'd love to hear a recording x

Angela x

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Anglea, I hope the recording link worked for you! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Angela McCrimmon on

Hey, it's the first time i've ever heard poetry read online. It sounded beautiful. Thank you.

Angela x

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

They've had a 'Poetry Monthly' thing going this month about pieces you felt were 'Performance Poetry' and if possible to try to put a recording on. One of my computer techie sons came to stay so he helped me see how to put a recording on Sound Cloud. So, as I said to Bee when she suggested it, it was probably a good idea to check I remembered how to do it!. Thanks for your appreciation, Angela. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by tibi popovici on

Love the rhythm and the contrast it's so good.
Nice work.

T.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tibi. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhianon

We have been having such contrasts in weather lately - so no wonder you felt it would be a good subject to write about. As long as there are bits of sunshine to counteract the rain and wind, I will be happy.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Agreed, Jean! When we moved so near to Wales, I felt my husband thought we would have so much rain, but was suprised to find how rarely was a day all wet. And actually the Westerlies coming in have lost a lot of their rain by the time they come here I think! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

your poems about what you observe within nature and the weather are always spot on.

I loved the way it moved along smoothly, giving an insight into how when you're older it's difficult to walk as quickly.

Yes! There were some great descriptions and I enjoyed.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny, and yes there was the contrast in the mobility difficulties of the elderly with our enjoying walking on the soggy grass, as well as the weather contrasts. Glad you enjoyed. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Enjoyed, so very much Rhiannon, and Bee is right about that charismatic voice of yours.

A splending poem, once again, transporting your readers, right there, and yes, aren't birds a pain when they decide to fly just as you get the binoculars focused.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Tina. Glad you enjoyed the walk after the rain! Birds are so often little flitting brown silhouettes aren't they, though sometimes voice or flight helps! Rhiannon