Winter's Kiss

By skinner_jennifer

Thu, 07 Jun 2012
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When Autumn
surrenders to Winter,
laying herself open...
unprotected...her leaves
once a golden carpet,
now withered, whisked away
tumbling...flying on the breeze,

a chilly wind bites,
bringing an icy twinkle
upon snowy ground...
earth becomes drowsy
a need to slumber,
all but a few creatures
lay still...languorous,

those that are wakeful
must heed impetuousness,
for Winter's beauty deceives,
entrancing the foolish to play,
the attraction like a maiden
at her wedding all in white,

then turning to a menacing blight,
for the hazards to come are many,
furtive danger lies waiting,
so take time to slow down,
till Spring time comes around.

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Enjoyed this, Jenny. Thoughtful. Take care, and wait for the spring! True of wintry periods of life too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
You are so right Rhiannon, thankyou so much for reading this poem, and for your kind thoughts. Jenny.

 

Submitted by sid on
I enjoyed this too, like how you liken winter's deceptive beauty to a bride. Really atmospheric and a clever double entendre

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi sid, thanks for reading my poem and leaving such a great comment. I think you got the point of the poem just right. Thanks again. Jenny.

 

Submitted by scratch on
Jennifer, this is a super effort some wonderful chosen words that support the whole thing one (personal) observation if I may? I'm a tiny bit unsure about the use of "languorous" at the end of the second stanza in the context of the whole. However this is a completely incidental (and entirely subjective) opinion on this superb poem, the personification of which is totally dazzling. Brilliant.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there scratch, what a wonderful comment and thankyou so much for reading this poem. I used the word languorous, as It rolled off my tongue and I enjoyed saying that word, so decided to use it in the poem. I don't really know what other poetic word I would use instead, but I'm open to suggestion. Thanks again for dropping by, much appreciated. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Sooz006 on
I hate loath and detest winter, it is one of my worst enemies and I can't stand it's approach. You captured it coming beautifully, made it seem far less menacing than it is in my mind, when we get our first frost and I have to bring the oleander inside, I'll try and remember this and greet winter as just another season ... then again.... Lovely Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Sooz, so grateful for you reading my poem, and thankyou so much for your comment. Jenny.

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Easy to think about winter at the minute - like now but just colder Jenny - really enjoyed this, some lovely language used. :-)

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there FB, your words on my poem have more than made my day. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this one and thankyou for letting me know. It's good to hear from you by the way, hope you are well. Jenny.

 

Submitted by TVR on
Hi Jen, catching up with everyone again. I thought this poem was really beautiful and you've captured the essence of nature perfectly. I haven't read much of your poetry, I don't think you write it that often. You ought to though, judging by this effort which was stunning. Your facility with language and words continues to get better and better. Much enjoyed. Trev

TVR

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there Trev, sorry I've taken so long to get back to you about your great comment, only I've been away for a couple of weeks. What I nice thing to say about my poetry. I do tend to dry up sometimes, but once my batteries are recharged, I can soon get back into the swing. Anyway you made my day with your words, thankyou. Jenny.