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Like the 'turtle' simile.
Posted on Tue, 08 Mar 2016
Like the 'turtle' simile.
His name --- hers'. No apostrophe.
Good cut in by Harry
EC with hers. Again no apostrophe
Is it not a bit much of a coincidence tha OC had report on her desk...
Read full commentPosted in EBOLOWA 31
3rd para - 'if the Greek was
Posted on Sat, 27 Feb 2016
3rd para - 'if the Greek was dead'
'His mind' para- like the tattoo image. Take out 'bissful'. Tpp cliched. Like the ension at the end of this para.
In the 'He pressed..' para. Not clear who bastard is and who had...
Read full commentPosted in EBOLOWA 28
Cut 'to switch identities'.
Posted on Sat, 10 Oct 2015
Cut 'to switch identities'. You show that. Not sure about 'scales of time'.
'She said she ....pictures. Don't think the words work. And are unlikely words. What about recosnising voices.
Is it 'the boyfriend' already.
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Read full commentPosted in EBOLOWA 23
Hi Simon,
Posted on Thu, 08 Oct 2015
Hi Simon,
As always like the writing. It's crisp and direct and good dialogue. I also like this extra (think it is!) bckground of marc Benet. Last part of last sentence of para 2 doesn't quite work.
Do we know who Monique is? Will...
Read full commentPosted in EBOLOWA 22
Love it Simon. Vast
Posted on Mon, 28 Sep 2015
Love it Simon. Vast improvement and best of all the insights inot Candace, her uncertainly, less cocky. Now flustered and unsure. The story needs that.
Para 1 - needs a bit of tweeking. Reads as if tailwind behind Candace. Have forgotten...
Read full commentPosted in EBOLOWA 20
Simon - loved this change and
Posted on Sun, 20 Sep 2015
Simon - loved this change and esp. the blackmail over the daughter. Very powerful. Most of my comments relate to 1st part.
'sparkling like a Christmas tree ' - too cliched.
'Throw up' - don't need 'his dinner'
"Fuck you,'...
Read full commentPosted in EBOLOWA 19