Like What We Was

Cherry

By Bee

Fri, 29 Jan 2016
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23 comments
 

We feared change

but found just sameness. 

No wings sprouted



or extra limbs hinged

on insect joints pointing

accusations in all directions. 



No newfound pleasantness,

or particular ugliness,

bugged us - it was just we



with a sense of minus about

us, nonetheless 

us, as we always was. 



The same - ish...

ish, yes, same, only -

diminished, all.

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Submitted by Pat G on

Delicate, fine and incisive as a bug's mandibles.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Patsmiley

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

seems like a sense of anticlimax when facing the mundane wearying routines and irritations again, looking for 'the excitement of all problems solved' feel.  I do find reading scripture and good notes to guide in that can help my own feelings, prayers, and relationship work. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

It's really about things not always turning out to be as horrendous as we imagined they might be, once we get there. But we must take comfort wherever we find it, as you suggest. Thank you, Rhiannon. 

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Full of the wisdom of experience. 'ish' is a wonderful suffix, a word in its own right.

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you Philip. I agree, ish should be in the dictionary - definition = but not quite.wink Maybe we could write a poem with Ish as the title. Inspiration point, maybe? 

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

I think I got that it was about your acceptance of things turning out not to be as bad as anticipated. You do have such a gift with words.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Oh that's such a relief. Thank you Jean.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you so much for the cherries. Wasn't sure about the poem, so found them reassuring. x

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

I agree with you so much about that 'ish' word Bee, it certainly made this poem, and it should definitely be in the dictionary.  It's one of those words sorely neglected, after all when we sneeze, what is an 'Atishoo!' without the 'ish'??  smiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

I never thought of that, Tina. Perhaps they should add it in the dictionary as an example of onomatopoeic usage. 

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

You sum up my thoughts precisely in this poem Bee. I'm a worrier...always have been, but will remember your poem next time I get a niggling thought about a situation that seems really traumatic.

Many thanks for sharing.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

It's comments like yours that make writing worthwhile. Thank you, Jenny. 

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

the same but different. Who can ask for more?

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks CM.

Bee

Submitted by Jewel Serpent on

Wow, this is simple but affecting. The sense of ambiguity is painful. 

"with a sense of minus about us". I really like that phrase!! 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Jewel.

Sense of ambiguity - I really like that. Thank you.

x

Bee

Submitted by MarciaMarcia on

   Acceptance of anticipations and all we create within ourselves

   Acceptance  of outcomes and the relief and release of all that silent, or not so silent struggle

   which filled the before

   Acceptance of..."is that all it was"...."is that all it is"

   Expressed beautifully in this piece.      MarciaMarcia

           I can't find "The Walker" now

Permalink Submitted by MarciaMarcia on Mon, 2016-02-01 15:52

    * I was so very moved by your poem  "The Walker"....that I could only comment with a poem ....back to you....inspired by your words. 

Was this OK with you ? I've done this in response to "Lavadis" submissions. 

    I happily see,  that you continue to post  your stories and poems. I interpret this as a sign of your recovering energy,  which continues to fuel your spirited words, within your sharing with us, all that becomes......"Bee's Journey"   Bravo !!!!!

Thank You......MarciaMarcia

         

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Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Picture Credit:http://tinyurl.com/zu4ey6c

 

Submitted by Bee on

Fantastic picture, insert; I could hardly spot the difference. Thank you.yes

Bee

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

glad you like it bee! Going up on social media a bit later this morning

 

Submitted by Bee on

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Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Goodness Bee,  you are good with words and form too.  I do so hope from this poem that things were not as bad as you thought they would be.  Though they seemed pretty bad to me and your courage was inspiring.

Always in my thoughts,

Moya x