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Silas Nash book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 16
‘Didn’t somebody come to our borough asking about a missing sister in Morecambe?’ Nash asked. He’d come out of the interview two days earlier and...
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Silas Nash book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle Chapter 15 (b)
Nash took the new pictures and put them in front of the ones he already had. Max had a glimpse of the file, and there seemed to be a stack of photos...
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Silas Nash book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle. Chapter 15 (a)
Max was fifty-four hours into the ninety-six that they were allowed to keep him before charging him or letting him go. They went through the same...
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Silas Nash Book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle Chapter 14
Nash got back to Barrow by early afternoon. Three bodies for an autopsy would take time, but Robinson promised to fast-track them and get the results...
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Silas Nash Book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 13
Nash’s third interview with Max had just started, this time with his solicitor, Jane Pearson, present. The second interview the night before was...
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And you've done it to me
Posted on Thu, 01 Jan 1970
And you've done it to me again, just geting solidly into it and it stops...but I loved every word. You write with such grace and style. You have a bohemian sophistication that reeks of class even when you're writing down and dirty stuff.
Read full commentPosted in Las Vegas 3
Wow!
Posted on Wed, 07 Jan 2015
Wow!
Read full commentPosted in You Are No More...
I mean, how many girls get
Posted on Thu, 01 Jan 2015
I mean, how many girls get whisked around the world on a flying carpet? He literally knew how to sweep a girl off her feet, unfortunately, later on; I had to learn that there is a lot he sweeps under that carpet too. ...lovely use of metaphor....
Read full commentPosted in Session 4 - Being Married Perspective
The last line of this brought
Posted on Tue, 23 Sep 2014
The last line of this brought tears to my eyes .. but it's early and I was in the office at six forty five and haven't woken up yet, they wre morning tears, I'm not soft really, honest.
Adfverbs and words and phrases like ,rather, and...
Read full commentPosted in Reef 5 - Mayday!
This is the first of these
Posted on Sun, 21 Sep 2014
This is the first of these that I've read... beautiful writing. I loved every word of this. I'm also writing a dog story, but mine's darker. I'll be looking out for more of these.
Just one tiny thing, perhaps you could number...
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TV critics as a masterpiece
Posted on Mon, 03 Mar 2014
TV critics as a masterpiece unlikely ever to be equalled with some rating her show ,,, I'd put a comma after equalled.
guard of pastry chefs help their serving spoons at half mast...held?
Oh, come on Eton Mess witout a...
Read full commentPosted in The Golden Spoon Award
Little Ally’s head felt fuzzy
Posted on Sat, 30 Nov 2013
Little Ally’s head felt fuzzy… I’d keep the prefix ‘little’ for dialogue. When the narrator is referring to her as little Ally it gets a bit sickly. It’s like in the soaps when the baby’s always Baby so and so. ‘Who’s having Baby Jack tonight?’...
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Ally’s job was to say the
Posted on Thu, 28 Nov 2013
Ally’s job was to say the Lord’s Prayer as quickly as she could so that the monsters under the beds didn’t reach their bony fingers up, grab her by the ankle and pull her down underneath the floor to the great pit. …..Celt, I swear to you, I did...
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Odd use of capitalisation. I
Posted on Sun, 02 Mar 2014
Odd use of capitalisation. I'm not sure if this is done intentionally, but I'd be tempted to re-look at it and go for proper usage.
I like the wierd stiltedness of this, it reads a like an old Chinese proverb and that makes it...
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Slowly begins to reflect and
Posted on Sun, 26 Jan 2014
Slowly begins to reflect and refract amid a golden hue;... I think the word begins here, weakens the piece, up to this point it's strong and assertive while being poignant and beautiful, just that one little word made it feel weaker than it had...
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