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Monroe (8)
After just four hours sleep, Frank was back at his desk in Limehouse by 7 am. One of the guys from the Special Firearms Unit brought him a bacon...
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Monroe ( 7)
The Traffic Warden was still there when Frank and Mark reappeared from Doctor Jeremiah's luxury house. Frank pressed a five-pound note into his hand...
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Monroe (6)
After a short break, Monroe is back trying to solve the case of Thomas Sago. Frank was on his way to 62 Claremont Road, Forest Gate, the home address...
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Mr Russ.
I don’t have any War Medals from relatives. Dad did National Service in 1950, but was too young to serve in WW2. My Granddads were too young for WW1...
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Monroe (5)
Both Frank and Terry looked at the photo of Thomas Sago on the whiteboard and then back to the video. Yep, it was him. No doubt about it. Sandra...
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Posted on Mon, 02 May 2016
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Read full commentPosted in I'll Teach You To Burn (IP)
Really enjoyed this. The
Posted on Sat, 30 Apr 2016
Really enjoyed this. The characterisations were superb. Felt like I was standing beside them listening to every word.!
Read full commentPosted in The 100/1 shot
Good concept with lots of
Posted on Wed, 30 Dec 2015
Good concept with lots of possibilities to explore. This chapter does need a lot of tidying up though. Lots of typos to sort out and a lot more punctuation is needed to make it flow. Good start so keep at it.
Read full commentPosted in A.E Book I Arc I
I wrote "Knob" on everything
Posted on Thu, 03 Dec 2015
I wrote "Knob" on everything I could put my hands on at school. I used to pinch other kids books and write "Knob" and draw a cock all over them. Why? No idea. Just thought it was a cool thing to do. We all did. The drawing of a cock and balls on...
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Love the last few lines. Sums
Posted on Mon, 30 Nov 2015
Love the last few lines. Sums it all up.
Read full commentPosted in the We of We
This is so much better than
Posted on Mon, 23 Nov 2015
This is so much better than the first one. You've tightened it up and not used too many words. The first two paragraphs are good. But I'd lose a few of the "inhales, exhales"
Keep writing and keep reading. Try a few different genres as...
Read full commentPosted in Ice Heart (part 3)
Me? I loved it. We say sorry
Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015
Me? I loved it. We say sorry for almost everything. Sometimes it's brave to say it just the way it is. "I'm not sorry for telling you you're a complete moron and making you cry." Being just one of them...
But then there's the ending, where...
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Good start. I liked the way
Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015
Good start. I liked the way you gave the history of the two families relationships all within a walk back to the kitchen! Look forward to reading more of these,
Read full commentPosted in The Pennyfeathers, Part One: History
A big warm welcome to the
Posted on Sat, 11 Jul 2015
A big warm welcome to the site. Best thing I've read in ages. SOOOOOOOOOOO beleivable. Saw the characters as I read it. And...who the fuck is Alfie! Or should I say, "Whats it all about Alfie".
Read full commentPosted in Grown Man Cries In The Bahamas Chapter One
Fabulous piece of writing.
Posted on Fri, 03 Jul 2015
Fabulous piece of writing. Read it twice and kept going back to look at the photo so i could recognise the people. Honest, witty, and compulsive reading.
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